Hey! I really don't mind talking with people, so if you want to chat, I'm most commonly on Gtalk, google's chat client (also accessible from Gmail). I'm tonightslastsong at gmail dot com. Also, I'm on Skype. TonightsLastSong is my alias. If I'm not expecting your call and it's not obvious to me who it is, you may not get answered :P I've got tons of other stuff to do than to answer strange VoiP calls :D The most current versions of my music are always posted on my website ( http://tonightslastsong.000webhost.info/tlsMusic.php ). http://TonightsLastSong.bandamp.com/ admin@bandamp.com http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5561.html "What's this?!" you say? Why, this is TLS, returned from Canada, and his re-recording of the original [url=http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/837.html]"Acutally, 'Sorry' Wasn't the First Thing that Came to Mind"[/url] I'm missing a few female voices that are suppose to be in the chanting choruses at the end, but it's decent enough to post here. I'll probably give it one more recording, due to some things I'd like to clean up, but I won't bother naming these things; I'm not here to shoot down my own work. Tell me what you think. Here are the final lyrics. [b]Acutally, 'Sorry' Wasn't the First Thing that Came to Mind[/b] This is short, sweet and simple, like the line you drew between us. I need to hurry to get it all in; I can't afford to waste my breath. You know, places to go, people to see, oh, and I've got to do this thing... Based on what you did, for the last time we'd try, my Love, but you keep on going just closing doors You burn your bridges "I've had enough, --forever Yours" Don't know what I was thinking, But now I'm tired of breaking. Over and over we did this... We live in second-hand hate I wish to forgive, but we weren't on the same team This summer was a dance floor, dark and hot-- it's just like you It was all because of you And like the last time I tried, I don't buy it, but back when I did, no kidding-- I just about died Look, I just really don't need this, but for as much as you do, I'm rather confused Don't what I was thinking, Just so tired of thinking Over and over we did this... We live in second-hand hate I wish to forgive, but we weren't on the same team This is short, sweet and simple, like the line you drew between us. Mkay, maybe not so sweet, but I've been looking for a reason ever since you stabbed me, to forget your face But life's not just so easy Everyone deserves to happy at least once (maybe twice), so I'll hold my heart to my thoughts, and not against you But it's second-hand you versus all that I've been taught from the Other world It's just a phase, but I'll see what I can do I'm just so tired of breaking Simple and sweetly, She let us down But now we're losing-- We're losing our ground Simple and sweetly, She let us down But now we're losing-- We're losing our ground, And we're not on the same team Simple and sweetly, (Over and over,) She let us down ( we did this... We live) But now we're losing-- ( in second-hand hate) We're losing our ground, (I wish to forgive,) And we're not on the same team (But we weren't on the same team) Tue, 09 Oct 2007 17:16:53 -0400 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/837.html PLEASE BE SURE TO VOTE AND POST ... and stuff. (the "and stuff" isn't as important 8) ) The full name of the song is: Acutally, 'Sorry' Wasn't the First Thing that Came to Mind this was NOT the first song i started doing, though i liked the feel of it, so i paused everything else to work on it. hope you all enjoy. it's short and to the point, which is exactly how i wanted it to be. lyrics are below. This is short, sweet, and simple, like the line you drew between us I need to hurry to get it all in I can't afford to waste by breath You know... places to go, people to see Oh, and I've got to do this... thing... This is the last time I'll try Because you keep on going just closing doors And this is the last time I'll write you: "I've had enough. --Forever yours." Don't know what I was thinking, and I'm tired of breaking Over and over we did this We live in second-hand hate I wish to forgive... But we weren't on the same team This summer was a dance floor, dark and hot Just like you It was all because of you Like the last time I tried, I don't buy it But back when I did No kidding, I just about died Look, I just really don't need this For as much as you do, I'm rather confused Don't know what I was thinking, I'm just so tired of thinking Over and over we did this We live in second-hand hate I wish to forgive... But we weren't on the same team This is short, sweet, and simple, like the line you drew between us Mmkay, maybe not so sweet But I've been looking for a reason ever since you stabbed me to forget your face Thu, 28 Jul 2005 14:07:09 -0400 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5589.html So, I've changed the title of this song in the end, which before was "He Parts, She Parts... We Part." For starters, I'll have you know that this song has come a long way :roll: The music from this song has existed in my head since before the "Actually" song. (In fact, if you refer to [url=http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/837.html"]the first [Actually] post[/url] that I made a few years back, I even made a comment somewhere about how I had put another project aside in order to work on [Actually].) [b]Aspirations[/b] You hang your head low, he walks away This was the same thing you were told, like last time. They say 'God'll love you,' but to us it's more like he was searching our insides for someone else. No sleep last night, I thought of this-- it was the last thing I saw coming: (and I'm not sure I'll ever see you again) 'Sometimes we live, but baby sometimes we listen.' Your father's screaming Baby, he knows something we don't. Your mother's sobbing Somebody once told me, 'You just don't know what it takes.' And you know what? I think Somebody was right. I came to play this game, it buried me I'm just no good at this or anything. We thought that this was it, so we felt so safe But they're so far ahead that it looks that we've been doing everything alone. I came to play, this buried me and I'm no good at anything Take me to the places where you felt most safe, like the empty spaces of your heart But this is what we get for pulling and forcing Love to take the helm. I'm not so sure I'll ever see you again, in this part of town, in this kind of weather What did you expect from me? Just leave me with my regrets and solemn reasons for not doing what we promised. Your father's screaming Baby, he knows something we don't. Your mother's sobbing Somebody once told me, 'You just don't know what it takes.' And you know what? I think Somebody was right. I came to play this game, it buried me I'm just no good at this or anything. We thought that this was it, so we felt so safe But they're so far ahead that it looks that we've been doing everything alone. I came to play, this buried me and I'm no good at anything Take me to the places where you felt most safe, like the empty spaces of your heart But this is what we get for pulling and forcing Love to take the helm. But I never saw London with you. (Sometimes we live, but baby sometimes we listen.) And I never saw London with you. We just want to leave this town, and get away from all these lives Since-ended stories are just plain and boring You hang your head down, I walk away Maybe one day, one day... I'll go. Mon, 15 Oct 2007 22:13:37 -0400 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5821.html So, here's a semi-completed version of a song that I posted in the Lyrics forum a long long time ago :D See? I follow through. I'm quite sick at the moment, and my life is getting rather difficult to manage! It'll all be alright in time, but for the next little while, I'm going to remain quite stressed and worn out. Anyway, I know very well that there are imperfections in this, but I'm posting it because I know that I'm not going to have time for quite a while before I'm able to do more serious recording. This being the case, I really just simply don't have time to go back through and fix the problems in the recording. If you can, please look past the problems and take it for what it is. I doubt some of you older (as in older than me :P ) listeners are going to like this as much as some of the younger ones will. Sorry. That's just the way it is. There's some definite modern punk influence once the second half of the song comes in. You'll see what I mean. Personally, I like it, but I'm aware that I'm presenting this to a wide variety of listeners who may not share my same opinion. Just tell me what you think. I wrote this a while back, and seriously.. it doesn't really represent my current style. In fact, the only recording I've made out of my more "current" style is the Lock Down, Move On one... other than that, these recordings I keep posting are all from songs that I had written at least a year or more ago. Just an little FYI :) ps... my infamous piano-recording hiss is baaaack! I tried to minimize it, but sometimes it's rather obvious that it's present :) [b]Excalibur Would Be Nice[/b] A magic wave, spells of indignation... A feeling, a fire within, tugs on my imagination It says that you've done nothing wrong, and maybe it's my fault for staring so longingly at you But you know deep inside with the way you've acted, well, you ought to lose sleep tonight These fairy tales are just too far out of reach for my grasp on reality And wouldn't that be nice, if you could find a way to disappear and entrust your luck to that figure in the mirror? Leave your fights at home Leave your fights at home A tear escapes to think that you would do this A sigh behind closed doors won't fall on anyone's ears, which means that once again, I'm back to searching Hopefully this time, I'll find something sharper... Something that'll make history for every other poor, subdivided heart out there These fairy tales are just too far out of reach for my grasp on reality And wouldn't that be nice, if you could find a way to disappear and entrust your luck to that figure in the mirror? Leave your fights at home Leave your fights at home I've got a love sick mind that says you've done nothing wrong, and maybe it's my fault... But is it wrong that I want to cut you down? Cut you down... Cut you down... We'll slowly turn the tables until I've cut you down Just leave your fights at home I never wanted to own your ability to think, and I thought that you knew better I wish it was you who was standing on the streetside, in the pouring rain, waiting for an angel And wouldn't that be nice, if you could find a way to disappear and entrust your luck to that figure in the mirror? Leave your fights at home Leave your fights at home I've got this jewel you missed It's in the shape of my heart, but you can't see through it, to see my movtivating factors in all of this I wanted to... I wanted you to fall in love with not just anyone Just leave your fights at home, because you're never alone It's no tradgey to think that you'll realize that you're no better And I wish it was you who was standing on the outside, you poor inconsiderate--- I'll cut you down And wouldn't that be nice, if you could find a way to disappear and send us your love, instead of keeping it in your dresser drawer Best of luck to you--- Leave your fights at home Fri, 07 Dec 2007 15:23:01 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5812.html Hello, kiddies. I finished this a little while back, but never uploaded it. It's a followup track to [url=http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5619.html]the original For Lisa track[/url] which i uploaded back late October. You should know that this is actually a semi-live performance, all mic'd up and plugged into the machine, played in one take, and then played it while miss Lisa was present. Later, I went back over it with the layered vocals to make it more like I intended it to sound. Anyway, due to this "live" element, the track as a whole isn't very perfect :) For instance, I've got some serious breathing into the mic going on in a spot or two, and at the end of the second chorus, i defniitely moved away from the mic enough to muffle the sound of my voice. In the end, I decided to leave the imperfections, as they represent the moment to me. If I were to redo those parts, I'd always remember how the actual base performance was different than I'm giving to you here. My intention for uploading this track has nothing to do with a processed professional performance. I'm just letting you see the most recent outcome of what I've been up to. If I were to ever get popular by some fluke in pop culture, I'll maybe redo it and make it more "acceptable" to the general public :roll: [b]For Lisa (Happy Endings or Bust) (semi live)[/b] So we're here now with the ones you love My body's worn out, and the trip was crazy We'll have to sit down and talk about it It's hard to explain, you know I wish you could have been there The hard part now is knowing what you'll need for when they ask you, "How are you? Because you look like somebody is missing you..." And the hardest things to say might be something like, where you could be one year from today They catch us singing the songs from yesterday; the ones from long lost friends, and ones that we've left behind Breathe in deep-- We've got no regrets, but your voice with mine, it's just sent chills down this spine The hard part now is knowing what you'll need for when they ask you, "How are you? Because you look like somebody is missing you..." And the hardest things to say might be something like, where you could be one year from today A little lost, a little lonely, we've got to stay strong Hold out until we're found again What you want is everything to the heart of the boy on the bench over there He's miles away He thinks about you every day Who you are means everything to the heart of the kid who's lost without you You're miles away, as if forever away So, the hard part now is knowing what you'll need for when they ask you, "How are you? You look like somebody is missing you..." And the hardest things to say might be something like, where you could be one year from today Thu, 06 Dec 2007 12:08:51 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5619.html My dear friend Lisa was my inspiration for writing this song, and she gets 100% credit for the lyrics in the second verse and the bridge. I was stuck on them and she just started pitching ideas, and it worked perfectly for what I was going after. I began this song about a week and half ago. It just came together like magic... it was amazing. Once I started recording started today, a ton of ideas for how to improve it came to mind, and so I tried include as many of these unplanned ideas as I could on the spot, I can't garantee the quality of execution of said ideas :) Lyrically, this is a shorter composition than the rest of my songs, but it also is played a bit slower :) Actually, this song is the 2nd longest of my recordings so far ([The End of Tribulation(2)] being the longest, weighing in at 8:00). I hope you like it! I'm pretty happy with the way this one is turning out. [b]For Lisa (Happy Endings or Bust)[/b] So we're here now with the ones you love My body's worn out, and the trip was crazy We'll have to sit down and talk about it It's hard to explain, you know I wish you could have been there The hard part now is knowing what you'll need for when they ask you, "How are you? Because you look like somebody is missing you..." And the hardest things to say might be something like, where you could be one year from today They catch us singing the songs from yesterday; the ones from long lost friends, and ones that we've left behind Breathe in deep-- We've got no regrets, but your voice with mine, it's just sent chills down this spine The hard part now is knowing what you'll need for when they ask you, "How are you? Because you look like somebody is missing you..." And the hardest things to say might be something like, where you could be one year from today A little lost, a little lonely, we've got to stay strong Hold out until we're found again The hard part now is knowing what you'll need for when they ask you, "How are you? Because you look like somebody is missing you..." And the hardest things to say might be something like, where you could be one year from today Tue, 23 Oct 2007 16:01:00 -0400 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5860.html sorry for not following suit and uploading christmas themed things :) I'd really like to, and I have a few lyric sets that I'll use one day for exactly that purpose, but this year.. I'm just too busy, and I can't seem to FINISH finish any of my projects anyway. so, i decided to take a step in the direction of completing my tracks. that being said... this is not "complete" :D i wanted to give you an idea of what the rest of this song would be like, though. this is a full LENGTH demo, though it's not a DONE song. catch my drift?? :) I'm not going to ask you to [i]not[/i] comment on what's here though.. don't get me wrong. tell me what you think, specifically of the bridge and onwards, as that's the new material in this upload you'll notice right away, if you're familiar with [url=http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5702.html]my old C version[/url], that this is the exact same track, just with the new audio spliced into it. consequently, you can really really tell where i put in the new guitar parts.. it's equalized differently. better, actually, though i tried to make it match the old version's sound to avoid the contrast as much as possible. i sang differently for the new vocals, too. at any rate, i'll certainly be making a new recording of this when things calm down around here, but until then, you'll just have to suffer through this version, made while holding 2 chat conversations over GTalk 8) [b]Lock Down, Move On[/b] [i](full length demo)[/i] Tonight, I'll be your One You're right--this could be fun Pack up your things, we're going out The sun sets in an hour In memory of all the ones who tried, but didn't make it We are headed forwards or we'll die trying Lock down-- we're moving on I haven't been trying so much, but it's hard to forget you No, I haven't been trying so much, it's hard to forget you We'll move, alone We could drive away, and I could see the sun light up your hair We could ride away We could see the cities, all lit up like they're something more special than you Round two, what do you say to a flight, a winter getaway? Pack up your things, we'll see the world This town sleeps in an hour In memory of all the things we've tried, that didn't work out We are headed forwards or we'll die trying Lock down-- we're moving on Bet you wouldn't leave me if I told you about the dreams I have No, I bet you wouldn't leave me if I told you-- if I told you about the dreams I have We could drive away, and I could see the sun light up your hair We could ride away We could see the cities, all lit up like they're something more special than you I've got some plans--- You know that When I promise you we'll get away, We'll get away We're sending something new and thrilling across the eyes of lookers on Lock down-- we're moving on We're sending something new and thrilling across the eyes of lookers on Eyes on me, and you, and I didn't even want to be seen... Let's go We could drive away and I could see the sun light up your hair We could ride away We could see the cities, all lit up like they're something more special than you We could drive away I can't even believe that you're here with me We could ride away Let's be gone Let's be gone We'll ride away Sat, 15 Dec 2007 15:08:19 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5702.html So, some of the things mentioned in the last version's thread were this: -the guitar was a little messy (Jiminuk) -i was laying down some perfect notes, but then was slapping out some really really bad ones too, since I was a bit sick and couldn't really reach certain pitches. (Dark) -the music was dominating the vocal lines at points, but nobody else seems to have thought so (me) -the harmony double-tracking was liked better than the other "fill in the breath gaps" doubling (Dark) -my 1st chorus transition into the second verse was _really_ sloppy, and so Kobeshi made a suggestion for fixing it. -a full band arrangement would be nice (WritersBlock) well, i cleaned up the guitar a bit, though some of you may think it's still a little messy. I kind of like it the way it is at the moment, but that might be just me. I hit some of those notes better, Dark-- I hope you notice :) I changed the mix volume to my liking. tell me what you think of the double vocal lines-- i didn't change anything about them really. the transition is a bit better and not so sharp. it may not be perfect, but it's approaching what i envisioned. still working on that full band arrangement idea :) i'll let you know if there's any progress made there. so, here's the [c] cut, which is not really different from what the {b} version in length or content. It's mainly just cleaner. personally, i want to redo the "than you" part at the ends of the chorusesesses, because i don't think they're quite matching the voal tone of the song. i'll keep the part, but i'll have to modulate it up a bit next time i try. minor stuff. Here are the lyrics, or.. at least as many as are recorded in this version: [b]Lock Down, Move On[/b] Tonight, I'll be your One You're right--this could be fun Pack up your things, we're going out The sun sets in an hour In memory of all the ones who tried, but didn't make it We are headed forwards or we'll die trying Lock down-- we're moving on I haven't been trying so much, but it's hard to forget you No, I haven't been trying so much, it's hard to forget you We'll move, alone We could drive away, and I could see the sun light up your hair We could ride away We could see the cities, all lit up like they're something more special than you Round two: What do you say to a flight, a winter getaway? Pack up your things, we'll see the world This town sleeps in an hour In memory of all the things we've tried, that didn't work out We are headed forwards or we'll die trying Lock down-- we're moving on Bet you wouldn't leave me if I told you about the dreams I have No, I bet you wouldn't leave me if I told you-- if I told you about the dreams I have We could drive away, and I could see the sun light up your hair We could ride away We could see the cities, all lit up like they're something more special than you Mon, 12 Nov 2007 19:15:24 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/6081.html Okay, so I made some progress here. It's still not done, but I won't get another solid chance for a while to sit down and work on it and make it longer and balance the sounds and get the EQ right (it's a little sketchy in some parts) and tweak the VBR encoding (it's step is too big, and when sound bursts out from silence, it's less than fantastic because the VBR hasn't refreshed to capture the proper quality) and a few other things (too much general reverb, levels, etc) I'll tell you now, the idea of this song's structure is that it's all rearranged from our traditional idea. It'll go: Verse, Chorus, Bridge, Verse, Chorus, Transitional Build, Neo-verse Lyrics: [b]And You've Gone and Told Love's Secret (You Fool)[/b] [i][c mixdown][/i] [u]verse 1[/u] I want you to come around I would never tell you anything to hurt you Open up, Love You've got my heart, there You've got everything. Everything meaningful is wagered in your reckless game. Open up, It's Love who's calling [i]knock at door, Boy responds with, "Who is it?"[/i] [u]chorus[/u] The stage is a dance in Citadel You, you gotta make it hard or sit it out Everyone is clinging to you, and I hate it, and you hate it I would never tell you anything to hurt you... [i]knock at door again, boy shouts, "I'm busy right now!"[/i] [u]bridge[/u] [i]Boy says, "One, two, three, four, One, two, three, four, ...Where'd she go? *sigh* She's over there again... Maybe next time? I'll just sit this one out. I dunno... Just sing to myself."[/i] Da da da da da da la da da Da da da da da da la da da Oh, I'm missing you I want you here Oh, no, Maybe I'm doubting "us" again? [u]verse 2[/u] If I held you until the stars fell down, from their places in the sky, would you tell all, all about everything? I've got this feeling that I'm dependent, overly. If I touch down now, I won't be pulling back up. I'm sure of this... Is Love killing time? [u]chorus[/u] The stage is a dance in Citadel You, you gotta make it hard or sit it out Everyone is clinging to you, and I hate it, and you hate it I would never tell you anything to hurt you... -------------------- the rest will be recorded later Fri, 15 Feb 2008 13:40:46 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/5675.html Et voila, mes amis. I can't say that this is "professional," but it's a heck of a lot closer than the last rough draft that I posted. The volume is a bit higher on this one, so you won't have to crank the knobs way up just to hear past that dreadful hiss that was in the last recording. I balanced this one better so that the hiss would leave me alone, but I'm afraid it showed up again a little with the highs on the EQ being pushed up. I regulated the tempo on this recording as well. In the first draft, I just played the song as I felt comfortable, but this time I really tried hard to stick to the tempo, except for the 2/3's section where it gets really quiet-- that part is intentionally off tempo and slower than the rest of the song. As a result of a steady tempo, the track time increased by a minute, making it now 8:00 The song is completely playable by a single human being at the keys of a piano, though I recorded this in what seemed to be hundreds of parts in order to better capture the 3d feel of a piano when I play it. At 6:16 there's a rather sharp contrast of panning effect, due to the fact that the section just prior to it should have been recorded in better 3d sound. Since it wasn't, then consequently, the transition back into a truer 3d sound is rather blunt. Meh... The bass is a quite murky... I tried to bring it out with some EQ work, but my computer's got _very_ little ram for this whole music editing thing. The project file was 2.5gb, and I couldn't live-preview any of the effects that I was using to polish the sound. In fact, the project in RAM was larger than the RAM I even have on the computer, and my C drive was too low on disk space to properly expand the virtual memory's page file, so in the end, I've had my iPod plugged into the machine as a secondary drive for a scratch disk. It's been intense these last few hours. Um... aside from that, I'd like to know what you think about the track now. I heard what some of you suggested, about maybe adding a guitar to it, and I am in fact working on something, but I don't know if it'll ever end up as a full-blown project. I dunno. Maybe. I'd like to, but I've just got so much to do. I wasted the entire day today getting this recorded. Recording this at so many angles took freaking forever. I've eaten only a 3 Musketerrs bar and 4 of those amazing LifeSavers Wint-O-Green mints. Man.. I'm hungry. Later guys. TLS Tue, 06 Nov 2007 00:03:37 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/6502.html So, in my skimpy bits of free time, this is what I've been toying with. I finally took some time to figure out the beast called "FL Studio". The learning curve is a little rough, but I think I'm getting the hang of it. This is my first actual project in it. I'm pretty tired of hearing 5, 6 minute songs that were done in FL. This one weighs in at 3:27. Short and to the point. To help you listen to this song, I've made a timeline of the things that I envisioned while writing this song. (Explanation to follow) [img]http://tonightslastsong.000webhost.info/images/Thievery%20Timeline.jpg[/img] As you can see, there are 9 segments. [b]I - Course is Plotted[/b] -- The group I will refer to as "Thievery" makes its way to a selected destination. Thievery is marked on the timeline by (mainly) red portions. Marching, marching, marching... [b]II - Within Sight[/b] -- Target village, inhabited by those referred to as "Innocent" (yellow on the timeline), comes into sight. Just a little further now. Communication between those in Thievery. Preparations for battle begin. [b]III - Unexpecting[/b] -- [i]Innocent[/i] village (somewhat of an oriental influence here) is portrayed in a somewhat peaceful, oblivious state. The sound of the march catches the attention of a sentry, who cries out the warning. ... But it's too late. [b]IV - Thievery[/b] -- The war begins, and the [i]Innocent[/i] fall like toys toppled by [i]Thievery[/i]. [b]V - This is Life[/b] -- [i]Thievery[/i] gets fancy and shows off amongst each other. This is their collective life. This is what do. This is Life. [b]VI - In the Distance[/b] -- In the distance, another [i]Innocent[/i] village is portrayed. Not only innocent as well, they are unaware of their falling neighbors. Soon the innocence is shattered. [b]VII - Horror Pending[/b] -- [i]Thievery[/i] moves from the first village to the second, from segment VI. They are falling even more quickly than the first... [b]VIII - August[/b] -- [i]Innocent's[/i] warning cry returns (although overpowered by [i]Thievery's[/i] war anthems) as suddenly the second village understands what has happened. They can only hope to warn other surrounding peoples. If there ever was hope, it has evaded the [i]Innocent[/i]. [b]IX - Tumble[/b] -- As [i]Thievery[/i] moves on, away from the two villages, the [i]Innocent[/i] who have barely survived now lie in the rubble of their lives. Their strength fades... A couple of toddler children wander about in the landscape as they seek to understand why these events transpired. ----------- tLs Sat, 14 Jun 2008 17:19:01 -0400 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/6170.html Well, here's a more complete recording of the song. I'll just say that I'm not [i]completely[/i] happy with the vocal job at some parts, but I won't tear the song apart before you even hear the whole thing. (I've posted a new version [url=http://tonightslastsong.000webhost.info/mp3s/xxyoufool.mp3]on my site[/url] [i](direct link)[/i] which is a different recording entirely :P ) Note, that there are a few notes in the vocals that sound like they shake and tremble (one of which is in the chorus). I can only conclude that I damaged the audio while filtering out the hiss. (Why it affected only a single note or two is still beyond me, but hey.) I'll fix these corrupted notes in a future recording. There are a few loosely executed timing issues. It's mostly just some small fine-tweaking things. I'm out of town for a couple of weeks, so I wanted to post this now, rather than later. All feedback is welcome, of course :D Lyrics: [b]And You've Gone and Told Love's Secret (You Fool)[/b] [i][ee mixdown][/i] [u]verse 1[/u] I want you to come around I would never tell you anything to hurt you Open up, Love You've got my heart, there You've got everything. Everything meaningful is wagered in your reckless game. Open up, It's Love who's calling [i]knock at door, Boy responds with, "Who is it?"[/i] [u]chorus[/u] The stage is a dance in Citadel You, you gotta make it hard or sit it out Everyone is clinging to you, and I hate it, and you hate it I would never tell you anything to hurt you... [i]knock at door again, boy shouts, "I'm busy right now!"[/i] [u]bridge[/u] [i]Boy says, "One, two, three, four, One, two, three, four, ...Where'd she go? *sigh* She's over there again... Maybe next time? I'll just sit this one out. I dunno... Just sing to myself."[/i] Da da da da da da la da da Da da da da da da mm la da da Oh, I'm missing you I want you here Oh, no, Maybe I'm doubting "us" again? [u]verse 2[/u] If I held you until the stars fell down, from their places in the sky, would you tell all, all about everything? I've got this feeling that I'm dependent, overly. If I touch down now, I won't be pulling back up. I'm sure of this... Is Love killing time? [u]chorus[/u] The stage is a dance in Citadel You, you gotta make it hard or sit it out Everyone is clinging to you, and I hate it, and you hate it I would never tell you anything to hurt you... [i]Boy clears throat... exhales... and walks away.[/i] [u]Verses 1 & 2 revisited[/u] I want you to come around I would never ask you anything to hurt you Open up, Love You've got my heart, there You've got everything. Everything meaningful (is wagered in your reckless game.) If I held you until the stars fell down, from their places in the sky, would you tell all, all about everything? I've got this feeling I'm dependent, overly. Your love, does it love me? Your love, does it love me? Fri, 07 Mar 2008 08:33:14 -0500 http://forum.bandamp.com/Audio_Review/6235.html I've got a sense of humour, right? Well, just so you know, the mp3 i've uploaded is actually an outtake, and not the real song. (it's close, but it's not quite the real thing.) You'll know the screw up when you hear it. The lead vocal cuts out after the messup. 8) Here's the real version, if you're interested: http://tonightslastsong.000webhost.info/mp3s/02youfool.mp3 (personally, i like the outtake one better.) (or, try out The Chipmunk Chronicles version found here: http://tonightslastsong.000webhost.info/mp3s/TCC/01youfool.mp3 ) I've been having the hardest time recording the vocals for this new version of the track, most probably because i'm downright sick of the song. I'm so tired of it. I've listened to it hundreds of times, revising it and picking it to pieces. My fingers are blistered. My chest hurts. I think I'm getting sick. Boo hoo, I know. But really. This is the 3rd full go against the vocal brick wall (for this particular recording of music). The vocals weren't excited enough for the last long chorus, and it sounded like I was retarded, so kept redoing them. They're better now, but i'm still not happy with it as a whole. I think I got a little too pop'y and bouncy with some of the parts... an overcorrection for my droning sound that I've fixed. So sue me. K, so the melody has changed a little. The reason for the outtake is because i accidentally used the wrong note, one from the old melody, and then realized it half a line later. Then it got dramatic. :D I'm aware of probably 98% of all the faults any of you are going to point out, but that's okay. I'm done with this! But of course, feel free to say anything about the mix that comes to mind. A scpecial thanks to Avi, for simply pasting a link to a page on musiciansfriend.com, which made me finally just get myself in gear and buy a cheap mic to improve the quality of my recordings. Thanks man :) [b]And You've Gone and Told Love's Secret (You Fool)[/b] [i]eff c version - the outake[/i] [u]verse 1[/u] I want you to come around I would never ask you anything to hurt you Open up, love You've got my heart, there You've got everything everything meaningful's wagered in your reckless game Open up It's love who's calling [i]knock at door, Boy responds with, "Who is it?"[/i] [u]chorus[/u] (Mmmm) The stage is a dance in Citadel And you, you gotta make it hard or sit it out Everyone is clinging to you, and I hate it and you hate it I would never tell you anything to hurt you [i]knock at door again, boy shouts, "I'm busy right now!"[/i] [u]bridge[/u] [i]Boy says, "One, two, three, four, One, two, three, four, *sigh* She's over there again... Maybe next time... I guess I'll just sit this one out, too I dunno... Just sing to myself."[/i] Da da da da da da dla da da Da da da da da da mm dla da da Oh, I'm missing you I want you here oh, no, maybe... Oh, I'm doubt us again [u]verse 2[/u] If I held you 'til stars fell down from their places in the sky Would you tell all? All about everything? I've got this feeling I'm dependent, overly. And if I touch down now, I'm not pulling back up. I'm sure of this Is love killing time? [u]chorus[/u] (Mmmm) The stage is a dance in Citadel And you, you gotta make it hard or sit it out Everyone is clinging to you, and I hate it and you hate you [i]deep breath[/i] I would never tell you anything to hurt you [i]Boy clears throat... exhales... and walks away.[/i] [u]Verses 1 & 2 revisited[/u] I want you to come around I would never ask you anything to hurt you Open up, Love You've got my heart, there You've got everything. Everything meaningful (is wagered in your reckless game.) If I held you until the stars fell down, from their places in the sky, [b]at this point, the song comes to a screeching halt, with the words of realization: "...wait a minute. WAIT!!"[/b] would you tell all, all about everything? I've got this little feeling: I'm dependent, overly. Your love, does it love me? Your love, does it love me? Wed, 26 Mar 2008 00:20:57 -0400